【干货】新版ACT写作考试实例文章解析Body部分
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发表于 2016-01-28 17:23:39
大家还记得上一篇由国际考试圈学术培训总监李谦老师带来的干货“新版ACT写作考试实例文章解析”，接下来的内容将继续针对新版ACT写作考试的全文进行细致评述。仍然以2篇样文为分析对象。大家一起学习学习吧。
下面，我们来看文章Body部分：
I 篇中间三段
It is the popular view among companies which are moving toward automation that robots can do many tasks better than humans. For example, in the automotive industry, most of a car’s individual components are manufactured by pre-programmed robots which have much greater and more precise output than would be possible for a human. In addition, robots cut down the cost of production by a considerable amount. If a company hires an employee to complete a simple task for $50,000 per year but could instead buy a machine for a one time purchase of $30,000, it is far more cost effective to buy the machine. Lower cost of production means that the goods produced can now be sold at a lower pricepoint which passes the savings on to the consumer. Companies producing goods rightly contend that the use of machines to complete low-skill jobs has only positive impact for everyone.
Beyond these benefits for industry, some believe that machines will shape the future for the human race. Innovation and invention of new more intelligent machines can push us as humans toward new, unimagined possibilities. For example, before the first airplane was invented, people could only dream of human flight, but at the moment of takeoff, a whole new world of unimaginable possibilities was suddenly within our grasp. Through even just that one invention, an entire multi-billion dollar a year industry was born, and our lives improved and advanced in a multitude of ways. Who can know what great advancements may be brought about by a more intelligent machine than what we possess today? The possibilities are endless.
There are those who are less enthusiastic about all this progress and advancement. They argue that by not having to interact with fellow humans, we no longer are required to be courteous and have tolerance for others. While this may be true, this is a minor cost for a major increase in efficiency. Take the example of self checkout systems in grocery stores. Self checkout permits consumers to procure their goods and get out of the store quickly. This might seem like a small time-saver, but considering how often this experience is repeated reveals a cumulative effect. Across time, consumers end up saving hours, which improves the efficiency of their daily lives, allowing them to spend time on things that are of greater interest and meaning to them.
重点解析：第一段观点对应原题中的Perspective2，作者用实例谈到汽车制造行业用机器人比用人力更省，制造出的产品价格也更低廉且惠顾到消费者。第二段对应原题中的Perspective3，用飞机改变人们的生活为例支撑这个论据。第三段转承稍显突兀，先解释了原题Perspective1的观点，然后话锋一转，又用一个超市自助结算的例子说明机器做重复劳动，节省我们的时间，提高我们日常生活的效率。
II 篇中间三段
The economic implications of the potential mechanical takeover alone should be enough to dissuade anyone from moving too fast. In the event the robots are more widely used in the workplace, humans would surely be replaced. At first, businesses would benefit from the efficiency of robots, but eventually a depressed job market would lead to a population that struggles just to feed themselves and their families, let alone purchase the products these robots make. In the long run, society will suffer if it does not take care to prevent the economic consequences of giving everything over to machines.
Our careless use of automation has already taken a toll on our culture. People have been interacting with automation in nearly every aspect of their lives, whether it be shopping, banking, or the use of a telephone. The effect of this is obvious: basic respect for our fellow man is all but absent today because of increased interaction with automation. Why treat a machine with kindness? It suffers no emotional or psychological damage. In a culture saturated with automation, we get used to treating machines rudely, and we begin to treat each other rudely. This of course leads to all sorts of issues, like intolerence and incivility, and in the long run, results in the complete degradation of culture.
Even in the face of these obstacles, some people argue that the increasing intelligence of today’s machines is a good thing. After all, machine power can decrease the human work load. Computer processers double in power and ability every year. Computers are projected to reach human intelligence by as soon as 2025. The implications of this shift are unknown, but one thing is for certain. We are moving into this change too fast to anticipate and prevent damage to the human species. We are approaching this change too quickly for any sort of safety net to be built. Because of this, it is important that we as a species slow down our technological development so that we might consider all the implications of a change this big. We must figure out how to handle negative societal and cultural consequences before we embrace total integration of automated, intelligent machines.
重点解析：第一段还是开宗明义机械化进程不能太快，at first句援引原题Perspective2的观点，但是but转折拉回到作者的反驳，机器人会导致就业市场恶化致使人们无力消费，最后一句再提升论述层面：如果任何工作都由机器来做，整个社会会遭殃。第二段重申了Perspective1的观点，并且更为深入。第三段以一个让步状语从句开头点到Perspective3的观点，After all后两句说明机器和电脑带来的好处。然后讨论可能的后果，用两个We are too…to…的平行句式推进说明人类会对过快的机械化进程猝不及防，最后用We must句结束段落，掷地有声。
从这两篇的Body部分不难看出第一篇的论述较为扁平，第二篇的论述有纵深的推进更为立体化。文章分析到此，很多同学肯定想了解两篇文章该如何评分?以什么标准来评分呢。那么，你一定不能错过下一篇对于文章评分的详解。请持续关注国际考试圈，干货、学习资料不断更新中!
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